Monday, February 22, 2010

haikus?

garland of lilies lie
withering and heavy on your bosom-
dry taste of summer breeze
.
little spider stalks
gingerly on its own web-
time seeps through unnoticed
.
breeze blows dry dead lilies
black strands of broken web unstuck-
time moves riding your sigh

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7 comments:

(¯`•._.•[Raaji]•._.•´¯) said...

ahh... so good. soo good!

Shoonyata said...

mon ami, thanks...my 1st attempt at haiku :)

sift said...

da, how do you manage to keep the form and verse in rhythm?

i read up a bit on haiku, forgot what it was :-)
can sighs be similar to dead lilies?

haiku reminds me of a classical raga that revisits its tune with mischief and "adaah" (style...) - Like a hem in a saree...:-)

Anonymous said...

well written, you have real talent with words in poetry.

Forget Me Not said...

i love haikus
these are very well written!

Shoonyata said...

@ SIFT: sighs are not yet dead, they are withering :)

@anan & FMN: Thanks, glad you like this :)

Anonymous said...

garland of lilies lie has 6 syllables gar-land of lil-ies lie